kais77 - In all seriousness, if this is something you're truly passionate about, and have an active plan to pursue professionally, private message me. I live in LA and work in the industry.
That said, this will probably sound overly serious/important, but a "rule" I've established for myself/my company is to only read a script in a situation like this if the writer is either already in LA, or plans to move to LA imminently. Too many writers I've come across treat writing as either a hobby or a lottery ticket, think they can half-ass it, make a connection or two from afar, someone will read their script, love it, and magically roll out the red carpet for them to *then* move out here. But that is very rarely the case. In fact, it almost never happens, short of winning a screenwriting competition or some other freak occurrence. If you truly want to pursue screenwriting as a profession, you *have* to move to LA at some point. It's as simple as that. I'm not saying you have to do all of your initial writing or "learn the craft" here, but eventually, you do have be here. Sure, there are outliers, and some professionals will tell you that you can write/make it from anywhere, but what they don't tell you is that you basically have to be the next Sorkin to do so.
It's also about respect for the reader's time. To read a script and give proper notes takes anywhere from half a day to a day, and there is nothing more infuriating than an amateur asking a professional to read a script, only for the reader to be faced with a 100+ page document that reads like the writer has read maybe two screenplays and half of a screenwriting book. That scenario has happened to me countless times - heck, it's happened to me twice from people on this very board - and it can be maddening. It's also incredibly disrespectful.
No reader expects perfection from an amateur writer, but more often than not, I'm shocked at the level of writing an amateur writer thinks is acceptable, especially when asking a reader to devote at least half a day of their time - for free - to read and give feedback. Poor structure/characters/dialogue is one thing - those things are forgivable and take time to learn/master properly - but something any writer can learn out of the gate is proper formatting. Proper formatting is not only the easiest and quickest thing to master, it's the easiest and quickest indicator to the reader that you know what you're doing (or don't), or have the necessary eye for detail (or don't). And yet it's amazing how many amateur writers either think they're above proper formatting, or don't bother to learn it, when it's the one thing that can cause a reader to want to stop reading on page one.
Anyway, please don't take any of this as me being discouraging, especially to a fellow Ag. If I can help, I'd love to. That, and you might already be planning on moving to LA, and are great at formatting, if not a great writer. I don't mean to be presumptuous. However, you would be few and far between, as the vast majority of request like this, in my experience, end with people like me committing to helping someone who likes the *idea* of being a writer, but isn't willing to commit to what it takes to truly be one, and those situations never end well.
